Email -intercambio de casa
Aquí tenemos un modelo de un Email -intercambio de casa, no es demasiado formal, pero sí un poco porque se manda a una persona con la que no tienes confianza y apenas conoces. Se trata de mandar un email a una familia para intercambiar las casas para pasar el verano.
Este writing lo ha escrito el alumno Juan Antonio R. Yo se lo voy a corregir ahora para que otros alumnos puedan aprender de los errores. En rojo vamos a poner los errores, que los corregiré escribiendo lo correcto entre paréntesis, en verde las estructuras fijas que debemos emplear ante este tipo de textos y en azul las cosas buenas, tanto de vocabulario (porque sea adecuado para el nivel) como de gramática, que le dan nivel y calidad al writing.
From: juanpl45@gmail.com
Subject: exchange the flat
Dear Mr and Mrs Murray,
My name is Juan Antonio R.
I am writing in response to your advertisement which I saw published on the Second Hand web.
I have a flat in Oliva near Valencia. It is said that it has the best beaches in the area.
It is very well located, it took takes only one minute to get to the nearest beach, and not too far at from the main street, which is plenty full of shops and regional restaurants. If you like Spanish food, you can try the authentic Paella here.
The apartment was built in 2008. It has three bedrooms, two bathrooms, a living room with a big terrace which showed shows a stunning view of the beach, and a kitchen. The flat is fully equipped with air conditioning, a washing machine, a dishwasher, a microwave and a dryer. It has garage as well, it which is a big advantage as it is very difficult to park at in the street.
The urbanization (housing estate) is very quiet; it has a big private pool. If you are a young couple, you could enjoy at nights as there are some beach clubs (in Spanish: ‘chiringuitos’) which where you could dance lively music.
If you rent a car to visit other places near Oliva, you should remember that we drive on the right. It will be difficult at first, but you will get used to it.
If you would like need more information, don’t hesitate to ask me.
I look forward to hearing from you.
Yours sincerely
Juan Antonio R.
NOTAS:
GOOD GRAMMAR:
1. It is said that…
2. it takes only one minute to get to the nearest beach = buena estructura, que se utiliza para decir «se tarda 2 minutos en llegar a…» 3. Uso de relativos: the main street, which is plenty full of shops. No obstante, el alumno debe repasarse la gramática de los relativos, ya que a veces olvida poner la coma que precede al relativo, y otras veces utiliza un pronombre relativo incorrecto, como en la oración: there are some beach clubs (in Spanish: ‘chiringuitos’) which where you could dance lively music.
4. Pasivas: The apartment was built in 2008.
5. Other + plural: other places
6. Get used to: you will get used to it.
GOOD VOCABULARY:
fully equipped, as (meaning because), as well, stunning view
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