Daily routine
Esto es un writing sobre la rutina diaria de una persona (daily routine) que ha escrito un alumno, Antonio B., y ahora yo se lo voy a corregir. Se trata de un writing sencillo, que podríamos ubicar en un nivel intermedio bajo, pero a pesar de su sencillez, está muy bien escrito, tanto en estructuras gramaticales como en vocabulario.
En rojo vamos a poner los errores, que los corregiré escribiendo lo correcto entre paréntesis y en azul las cosas buenas, tanto de vocabulario (porque sea adecuado para el nivel) como de gramática, que le dan nivel y calidad al writing.
I have never worked yet so I devote my life to take care of my child, who is one year old. I get up when my son wakes up. The first thing I do every morning is prepare my son’s breakfast. Children don’t know that they sometimes have to wait for something, if they are hungry, they have to eat. It’s important to be quick because as I said, he can’t wait for eating. When he finishes off his breakfast, I can drink a cup of milk.
After breakfast we usually play in the dining room until he needs to sleep. While he is sleeping, I do my other tasks which are quite simple, I cook my son’s meal and I also cook the meal for my wife and me. When I finish cooking, I usually clean the kitchen and If (if) I have enough time, I tidy up my house.
When my child wakes up, we play again the dining room until he is (gets) bored. He has lunch at about 2p.m. While he is watching TV, my wife and I have lunch at 3p.m. because she works in Alicante and she go (goes back) home at about 2.15.
After lunch, my wife and I talk about our mornings and then she goes to bed while I’m playing with my child. When my child is sleeping, I do my English homework. Twice a week I go to Elche in order to have English lessons from 7 to 9p.m.
The best part of my daily routine is seeing how my son is growing. He has changed a lot in one year. But I sometimes feel tired because my child is really naughty. I only relax by sleeping at night.
NOTAS:
– El writing está muy bien escrito en cuanto a gramática se refiere. Cosas buenas que podemos destacar:
- Present Perfect + yet: I have never changed yet
- Present Perfect: He has changed a lot in one year
- Uso de la -s de 3ª persona del singular: my son wakes up, my wife works
- Other + plural noun: other tasks
- Finish + V-ing: when I finish cooking
- Saxon genitive: my son’s breakfast
- In order to + infinitive: in order to have English lessons
- Preposition + V-ing: I only relax by sleeping at night
- By: indica la manera en la que se hace algo. ¿Cómo se relaja? = durmiendo. En inglés como nos referimos a la manera, ponemos el by.
- Vocabulary: devote my life to, naughty (travieso), finish off + breakfast, take care of
A continuación, te recomiendo que revises la siguiente gramática en la web, para que puedas entender mejor las correcciones:
– Cómo y cuando se utiliza el genitivo sajón
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2 comentarios
Hello I’m Aroa and I going to talk about my favourite actress whose name is Antonia San Juan, she works in La Que Se Avecina, but she has also worked with famous director Pedro Almodovar
It made me happy saw her in the theatre last year
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Hello, the only mistake is «saw». You need «see» in this case, after make, we need infinitive without to.