Opinion essay sobre el cambio climático

Opinion essay sobre el cambio climático

Esto es un opinion essay sobre el cambio climático que ha escrito una alumna, María Carmen S., y ahora yo se lo voy a corregir.

En rojo vamos a poner los errores, que los corregiré escribiendo lo correcto entre paréntesis, en verde las estructuras fijas que debemos emplear ante este tipo de textos y en azul las cosas buenas, tanto de vocabulario (porque sea adecuado para el nivel) como de gramática, que le dan nivel y calidad al writing.

La tarea consiste en escribir un opinion essay, artículo de opinión, sobre el cambio climático. Es un writing de B1.

‘What can we do to prevent climate change?

Nowadays in the world and in our country the citizens are suffering the problems and effects that climate change produces. The temperature is rising little by little every year, the same happens with the level of the oceans and the number of illnesses that are produced by the sun are being more and more.

We are in a dangerous situation, so we have to do something to change it, but what could we do to prevent this problem?

Firstly, we have to know some tips which are very easy and all of us can do its (them) for example, we can separate the rubbish (or separate our rubbish). If we do that (this), we will can (will be able to) use the same products again after a tratament (no sé qué quiere decir esto, after their use, referido al uso de los productos???) Remember to separate paper, plastic and vidrio (glass) from the rest.

We are used to driving our car every day, so why do not (don’t) we try to let (leave) it in the garage and we take the public transport?

Secondly, the government is a very important part in society (muy bien no poner ‘the’ delante de society), so he (they) have to act, but how? For example, if citizens had a cheaper public transport system, they would use it more often.

In conclusion, I believe we are able to do more to prevent climate change, and we have to, as we have to keep the environment for next generations.

NOTAS:

El writing está bastante bien para el nivel. La alumna ha hecho uso de gramática de nivel, por ejemplo:

– pasiva de presente simple: … are produced by the sun…

– more and more = cada vez más

– relativos: which

– be used to + ing: we are used to driving

– society: sin artículo

– 2ª condicional: if citizens had… they would use…

– be able to: we are able to do more…

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