Email formal – intercambio de casa
Aquí tenemos un modelo de un email formal – intercambio de casa, no es demasiado formal, pero sí un poco porque se manda a una persona con la que no tienes confianza y apenas conoces. Se trata de mandar un email a una familia para intercambiar las casas para pasar el verano.
Este writing lo ha escrito el alumno Jesús F. Yo se lo voy a corregir ahora para que otros alumnos puedan aprender de los errores. En rojo vamos a poner los errores, que los corregiré escribiendo lo correcto entre paréntesis, en verde las estructuras fijas que debemos emplear ante este tipo de textos y en azul las cosas buenas, tanto de vocabulario (porque sea adecuado para el nivel) como de gramática, que le dan nivel y calidad al writing.
El writing es nivel B1.
From: jes67tg@yahoo.es
Subject: exchange the flat
Dear Mr and Mrs Bolton,
I am Jesús from Spain and I am writing to you in order to give you more information about our flat in Benidorm.
As I told you before, this apartment is near the beach, only 50 metres away (about 20 miles). It is on the 10th floor and it is very sunny and very confortable (comfortable)
I remember you told me that you were a young couple, didn’t you? So I think you will have fun in the 75m2 of the flat. The flat is full equipment (fully equipped) with two televisions (one in the living room and the other one in the main bedroom). The flat has a second bedroom which has twin beds, so if someone decided to visit you they could use them.
The flat has a new and modern kitchen too which was redecorated last year.
However, the most important thing for me is the view you will have: the beach, the city centre, the gardens and the lovely private pool.
Our urbanization is very quiet and it is near the main street, where you can find a lot of pubs, shops and restaurants, and if you like Indian food, you have to visit the White Elephant, don’t miss it!
If you want to know what could you visit (you can visit) in the area, you can go to the tourist information, which you can find near the town hall, and remember, we drive on the right! But I suppose that if you spend two weeks here, you will get used to it.
Well, if you would like to know more information about the flat, the city or the area, don’t hesitate to ask me.
Finally, could you send me more information about your flat, please?
I am looking forward to hearing from you.
Yours sincerely
Jesús F.
NOTAS:
1. El writing está bastante bien, ya que el alumno ha intentado utilizar gramática de nivel, como por ejemplo:
– question tags: …, didn’t you?
– think + will: I think you will have fun
– 2nd conditional: if someone decided to visit you they could use them
– pasiva de pasado simple: was redecorated
– relativos: which, where
– get used to
2. También ha hecho uso de estructuras propias de las cartas formales:
– Dear Mr and Mrs Bolton,
– I am writing to you in order to…
– As I told you before…
– However, …
– Don’t hesitate to…
– I am looking forward to hearing from you
– Yours sincerely
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